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I kiss you softly,
Savoring your taste.
I scrape my teeth
Down your neck,
But you don't even moan.
I brush your hair away
And kiss you on the forehead
Before pulling you close to me.
You don't respond.
You don't even blink.
You just sit there as I caress you,
I want more,
I would love more.
But you don't give back,
You can't give back.
Because there's a hole
In your chest
Where your heart
Has been ripped out.

You are dead
And I'm left loving
Your cold corpse.
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I love tormenting my OCs too much... :iconotlplz:
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Relic-Angel Featured By Owner Nov 4, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I wasn't expecting this to end like that. :o Beyond words.
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WhiteLucke Featured By Owner Apr 6, 2013  Hobbyist General Artist
I don't even know what to say about this it's so amazing :iconcryforeverplz::iconclapplz:
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harpyeagle45 Featured By Owner Oct 7, 2012
very insightful. Awesome. :)
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Student Writer
Thanks. :)
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harpyeagle45 Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012
your welcomes. :)
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Gamergirl654 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I...am soo...sad
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Student Writer
Because of the poem? :C
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Gamergirl654 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Lol, yes, I remember days when I used to feel numb, empty, anguished, all that jazz. Its just a small reminder. But I gotta say, its a realllly good poem. Makes me want to start poetry again.
;)
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Dec 13, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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SydneyRowe Featured By Owner Nov 30, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
thats cute
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks. :)
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SydneyRowe Featured By Owner Dec 1, 2011  Hobbyist Artist
your welcome
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gypsyfoxdancer Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
I can sadly relate. Good job pulling the feeling out in your imagery! :)
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :D
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gypsyfoxdancer Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2011
Good work!
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Alliegirl4eva Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
I thought that was absolutly amazing. It reminds me of what happened to me.
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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Alliegirl4eva Featured By Owner Jun 8, 2011
No problem
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skullzhead Featured By Owner May 19, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
I feel like this should get a DD. It's awesome. It's sexy, yet filled with heart a nd feeling. And only 22 lines long. Whooaaa. And, I feel bad for your OC's...
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner May 21, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks. :o
:XD:
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MvanMelsen Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011   Photographer
This is so sad.. but so beautiful!
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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29thspirit Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011
i didn't think the other person was dead, just incapable of loving. i dunno what happened, but something must have rendered him unable to love... sad stuff. i know that feeling of loving and caressing and never receiving any love back just too well... made me think of my ex-boyfriend.... args... *goes back to bed and starts crying all over again*
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Apr 2, 2011  Student Writer
:iconsadhugplz:
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killingursoulXx Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
i guess i know why its your most faved.......its awesome! :D
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 26, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! :glomp:
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WH1T3-N0153 Featured By Owner Mar 11, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
I hear tormenting OCs is a very common practice. Don't think you're alone. :XD:

I like the theme in this.
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2011  Student Writer
Haha. I enjoy tormenting them way too much. :XD:
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midnightstorm45044 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011  Hobbyist Digital Artist
But tormenting OC's is my favorite pastime! 8D
That was an interesting read. The ending definitely caught me off guard. For a moment I just assumed the other person just wasn't very loving, but then I started to realize right before the ending parts what was going on :XD:
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 8, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you! :D
Yes, torturing my OCs is my favorite time of the day. :iconimevilplz:
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izumouchiha Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011
wow... iv never met someone else who liked to torment their OC before :D
im so adding you to my friends now :P
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011  Student Writer
Haha. I do so frequently. Most of my poems are of me torturing my OCs by killing one of them off or something. :iconimhappyplz:
Thank you so much! :iconiloveyouplz:
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MadameEtoile Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011
I have experienced this before and the death analogy is a nice one. Thank you for writing it. :)
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 5, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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MadameEtoile Featured By Owner Mar 6, 2011
no worries :)
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Starlow-FTW Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
Wow...this was so sad...I like it.
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :D
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Starlow-FTW Featured By Owner Mar 4, 2011
Mhm~ Certainly.
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RainbowKnight Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011
this is beautiful
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Mar 3, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :glomp:
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crossmyheart1207 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
Aw this is so sad!
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you. :)
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Akina-Sumi Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Student General Artist
so touching... ;A;
very deep and powerful
;w; :heart: :+fav:
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Student Writer
Thank you so much! :glomp:
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Akina-Sumi Featured By Owner Feb 24, 2011  Student General Artist
your welcome! X3 :iconglomp2plz:
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athenaaqua Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Hobbyist General Artist
You are so romantic.
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:iconcollateral-damage666:
Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Feb 21, 2011  Student Writer
Sometime, yes. Sometimes, not so much.
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Mai-Taniyama-anime Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Student Writer
ooh, kinda sick and twisted but beautiful. i love it!
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Collateral-Damage666 Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks! :glomp:
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Mai-Taniyama-anime Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2011  Student Writer
you're welcome :handshake:
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